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書名:情蠱
作者:冰島小狐仙
繪者:Leila
出版:鮮歡
                                                                               
文案:
                                                                               
翦幽親手了斷師父的性命,卻斬不斷孺慕相思與報仇恨意。
然而,他收了那來路不明的孩子為徒,白晨無盡的眷戀與陪伴,
讓孤獨的他沉溺其中,幾乎放棄了仇恨──
                                                                               
只是,讓翦幽弒師的蠱、上一代的痛苦愛戀、以及殘酷的騙局,
卻讓他們盡斷前緣……
                                                                               
當相愛的兩人反目相向,當解蠱的唯一途徑是蝕骨噬心的後悔,
翦幽要如何做出抉擇?而深纏入骨的不變癡心,又該何解脫?
                                                                                
                  
感想:
                                                                               
在鮮網試閱完前三章,感覺是個愛恨交織、情仇不斷的故事,
                                                                               
我等著看白晨傻徒兒如何打動冰山美人師父的芳心,
                                                                               
所以帶著快樂的心情借到了書^^
                                                                               
                                                                               
以新人來說,能簡明流暢寫完一個故事就很不錯了,
                                                                               
《情蠱》的劇情通順可讀,本來我想給3.5顆星星,但……
                                                                               
愈看下去,BUG愈發壯大到我忍不下去的地步= =(扶額)


暫且跳過整本書最大的BUG,
                                                                               
作者不知是心地善良或者不願處理較麻煩的劇情,
                                                                               
有兩條支線都足以大肆鋪陳,狗血狂灑,沒想到卻輕易一筆勾過。

                                                                                
                                                                                
一條支線是玄冥門和萬蠱堂的鬥爭──
                                                                               
依照翦幽的師父白陌說法,

萬蠱堂幾十年前屠殺殆盡玄冥門人,只有白陌幸運逃過一劫,
                                                                               
按理萬蠱堂和玄冥門之間的殺戮應是不死不休,
                                                                               
所以白陌要翦幽勿向外人提及自己是玄冥傳人這點才有合理的解釋。
                                                                               
怎麼翦幽是玄冥傳人的消息傳出,萬蠱堂一點反應也沒有?
                                                                               
好歹也派出偵測的斥候意思一下嘛= =+
                                                                               
                                                                               
最後還變成白晨的姑母是萬蠱堂高手,兩個門派一家親,
                                                                               
白晨姑母貢獻道具,翦幽貢獻自己,
                                                                               
一起同心協力消滅融血母蠱,GJ!(真是一家和樂融融的結局ˋ(′~‵")ˊ)
                                                              
                                                                               
另一支線是沁風國王為了製作不老藥,下令抓走全國所有的藥師,
                                                                               
若有藥師拒不從命,甚至連同他的家人和村人一起抓走,
                                                                               
因此也順道抓走了白晨這個玄冥門的弟子,意圖不明……
                                                                               
很好!沁風王我看好你!這才是暴君惡役該有的表現!(鼓掌)
                                                                               
所以下一步該是沁風王看到翦幽美艷容貌而起色心,翦幽不從,於是大鬧王宮,
                                                                               
順利帶走白晨和被抓的村人,之後沁風王色心不死,持續派人騷擾風山巴拉巴拉。
                                                                               
(以上兩行純是我自己幻想的情節)
                                                                               
                                                                               
結果沒想到……沁風王只對翦幽的武藝驚為天人╮(╯_╰)╭
(這裡可以解釋成沁風王心裡只愛蘇輕寒一個人)
                                                                               
沁風王也很乾脆的說放人就放人,至於抓玄冥門人的原因是朋友送國王一本書,
                                                                               
裡面提到玄冥門人,所以好奇寶寶沁風王很好奇,
                                                                               
決定抓一個玄冥門人來研究……(囧rz)
                                                                               
                                                                               
後來村民繼續過著安居樂業的生活,一點被國王騷擾的跡象也沒有……
                                                                               
這是會想出要做不老藥的暴君該做的事嗎!(翻桌)
                                                                               
沁風王你身為暴君的尊嚴在哪裡!(丟筆)
                                                                               
                                                                               
至於沁風王的情人蘇輕寒也是莫名其妙,
                                                                               
蘇輕寒看著翦幽的眸光帶著驚羨和哀傷,

我還以為其中有什麼可歌可泣的前人往事,
                                                                               
沒想到只是因為當年蘇輕寒並非心甘情願留在沁風王身邊,
                                                                               
所以看著翦幽的眼中滿是羨慕……(那麼他應該會羨慕很多人才對= =)
                                                                               
總之最後就是一句話帶過,
                                                                               
沁風王和蘇輕寒終於有情人成眷屬,真是恭喜老爺賀喜夫人鏘鏘鏘ˋ(′~‵")ˊ



兩條支線都是雷聲大雨點小,我以為其中玄機很大,沒想到只是小漣漪而已,
                                                                               
就當作作者心地善良,不忍心折磨翦幽和白晨這對師徒吧。
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
終於要寫到全書最大的BUG了!(天啊!還沒講到重點我已經寫得落落長了o_o)
                                                                               
沒錯!問題就在那封信和那個死人身上!(推眼鏡)
                                                                               
                                                                               
當年才十歲的白晨記憶被封印,被靳宇護送到風山投靠玄冥門,
                                                                               
翦幽願意收留白晨最重要的關鍵就是那封寫給白陌的信,
                                                                               
以下開放機智搶答,請問那封信是誰寫的?
                                                                                
                                 
如果只看書信內容,理所當然會認定是白晨的父親季承軒所寫,
                                                                               
但是這個答案不可能。
                                                                               
白陌是個藥師,當年一定為季承軒把脈過,
                                                                               
他想必知道蠱毒已深的季承軒不可能十年後還活著,甚至能寫這封託孤信給他。
                                                                               
更何況季承軒的確在白陌離開後不久就死掉了。
                                                                               
好吧,假設季承軒當年憑著萬年靈芝等仙丹吊命,拖到十年後寫信給白陌,
                                                                               
那麼信中所言和事實有所出入……
                                                                               
                                                                               
第一個、哪來的「風山之約」啊?
                                                                               
試想白陌當年為了保護翦幽、躲開季家人,才從中原移居到風山,
                                                                               
這種情況下他哪裡敢訂定「風山之約」? ˋ(′~‵")ˊ
                                                                                
                     
第二個、既然託孤,為何封印住白晨的記憶?
                                                                               
信中說因家逢巨變,無法赴行風山之約,
                                                                               
只好讓靳宇帶著白晨前往風山,那也不至於要封住記憶,
                                                                               
難道要讓白晨以後長大了不明不白死於融血蠱毒? ˋ(′~‵")ˊ
                                                                               
                                                                               
歸納以上幾點,季承軒寫這封信的可能性是零。
                                                                               
換個更有可能的答案,是妹妹季承華模仿哥哥口吻所寫的偽信,
                                                                               
但,也不可能!
                                                                               
                                                                               
季承華當年偷窺到哥哥和白陌相互表愛,那段記憶已被白陌封印掉,
                                                                               
頂多模模糊糊察覺到季承軒與白陌之間隱約糾纏的感情。
                                                                               
而且她連白陌寫給季承軒的三封信也沒拆開看過,
                 
她哪裡有辦法模仿季承軒的口吻寫信給白陌?
                                                                               
還寫啥個根本不存在的「風山之約」?
                                                                               
雖然181頁提到當年是季承華封印掉白晨的記憶,把白晨送到風山,
                                                                               
但那封信也絕不可能是季承華寫的。
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
還有那個死人!
                                                                               
就是護送白晨到風山的靳宇,誰在他身上下了鳩合劇毒,也是個大問號?
                                                                               
我本來以為是萬蠱堂下了鳩合劇毒,意圖追殺玄冥門和季氏一家,
                                                                               
所以日後說不定會上演白晨為父報仇的戲碼,
                                                                               
這樣才符合託孤信所言的「家逢巨變」,但我又猜錯了。(囧rz)
                                                                               
季家根本沒有仇敵,也沒有遭逢巨變(這封託孤信內容根本亂寫一通_/)
                       
死狀悽慘的靳宇根本是自己給自己下毒= =+
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
凡事要講求證據,證據就在書裡130-131頁兩個下人的碎嘴內容。(再推眼鏡)
                                                                               
翦幽就是聽了兩人的談話才會認定白晨就是害死師父白陌的季家後人,
                                                                               
因此才會對白晨痛下毒手、逐出師門。
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
讓我們來研究這兩頁碎嘴內容吧。(繼續推眼鏡)
                                                                               
兩個下人說:
                                                                               
1.白陌是被季家害的,季承軒在白陌身上放了融血蠱毒,心懷愧疚才放走白陌。
                                                                               
反駁:白陌自己主動放進融血蠱毒,季承軒才是不願白陌為季家犧牲的人,
                                                                                
   下人所言與事實不合。
            
2.白陌還寫信給季承軒提到自己新收了個徒弟。
                                                                               
反駁:177頁提到季承華並未拆過信件,
                                                                                
   季承華就算知道白陌收徒,也應該是在白陌死掉那年她來到風山才得知的,
                                                                                
   下人所言與事實不合。
                                                                               
3.靳宇很聰明,想出這種絕招,翦幽看到信一定會收留白晨,
                                                                                
 只可惜靳宇即使以毒攻毒還是沒命活下去。
                                                                               
反駁:這個論點很有趣,難不成寫託孤信的人是靳宇?
                                                                               
   但書裡對靳宇和季承軒、白陌的關係隻字不提,
                                                                                
   靳宇何德何能知道兩人有啥約定之類的ˋ(′~‵")ˊ
                                                                                
   用這招苦肉計使玄冥門收留白晨未免太大費周章了,
                                                                                
   鳩合可是殘忍霸道的劇毒,有必要給自己下這種毒以取信玄冥門嗎?

   而且季承華見到翦幽後也沒提過靳宇這號人物,
                                                                                
   加上前兩點都被其他證據反駁掉,
                                                                                
   所以本席認為(咚咚咚!敲議事槌)碎嘴第三點的事實不成立。
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
最後結論就是兩個下人自己在編故事莫名其妙亂講話?
                                                                               
所以兩個下人莫名其妙被急怒攻心的翦幽殺掉,
                                                                               
乖巧好徒兒白晨也莫名其妙被翦幽廢掉武功逐出師門……
                                                                               
                                                                               
一切都是誤會啊這位太太~~~ ( ̄口 ̄)!!
                                                                               
                                                                               
(白晨:僅因片面之詞就被打個半死的我才是最大苦主哭哭~~)
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
搞了半天,白陌不要翦幽提起玄冥門人身分以及不要離開風山,
                                                                               
只是因為不敢面對季承軒和季氏一家,跟萬蠱堂一點關係也沒有╮(╯_╰)╭
                                                                               
                                                                               
搞了半天,靳宇所中的毒和那封託孤信,難道真是被害人自導自演嗎?
                                                                               
(209頁翦幽臨死心願之一是去看看靳宇的墓,感謝靳宇把白晨帶到他身邊,
                                                                               
  唉~我也想去看看靳宇~~試試觀落陰這招問清楚到底是不是他給自己下毒= =+)
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
《情蠱》這個故事前文不搭後續,無法自圓其說,
                                                                               
我深陷在這本書最大的BUG裡,
                                                                               
後來我已不想去深思好鬼扯的解蠱方法是──

集結所有流傳出去的子蠱,回歸母蠱完整之身。

(這是參在一起做成撒尿牛丸嗎= =+)
                                                                               
也不想去追究連心蠱居然具備錄放影機回溯過去的功能,
                                                                               
還有121頁翦幽不斷在研究的蠱蟲後來為何隻字不提?
                                                                               
還有80頁白晨居然稱呼白陌「師公」@@
                                                                               
師父的師父,應該叫「太師父」吧。
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                               
吐槽也很耗體力,寫完這篇我感到深深的疲累感orz
                                                                               
同樣都是冰山美人藥師,
                                                                               
豹姿筆下的素飛言才是本人的偶像啊>0<
                                                                                
                                                                                
~~~寫於2010.1.26

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